1) Grammatical "Person"
- First Person (I)
- Second Person (You)
- Third Person (He/She)
2) Level of Insight
- Objective P.O.V (Sees and hears like a camera)
- Limited Omniscient (Only knows one character's thoughts)
- Omniscient (All-knowing)
I ambled up the small flight of steps, my head held high. I noticed the watchful eyes of new students following my every move as I stood to face them. “Ladies and gentlemen, the light of knowledge!” I announced loudly as I gave a signal with my eyes to my potbellied assistant. He stepped slowly to the first person sitting in the first row, carrying a lighted thick, white candle. His trembling hands lighted the boy’s candle, stepping back to see the usual ritual of the flame being passed down. I looked back at the mass of students and cleared my throat of phlegm, preparing to give my speech.
New student
As I received my candle flame, I smiled at the headmaster’s assistant, thanking him silently. I stared at it. It was a lovely sight and it looked like a leaping, jumping dragon that raced and danced about wildly in its confines of the candle. I was so mesmerized by it that I did not notice another candle coming into my view, breaking my trance. I then realized it was just another boy wanting to light his candle. As I turned behind, I saw this process repeating itself until the hall was filled with the “light of knowledge”, as the headmaster called it, all the flames burning steadily.
This is a very informative piece of work, Wei Loon! You included the types of Point of View, which was very helpful. You took the extra effort to find pictures. While this is a small step, but it makes the whole post look much better and I can see the effort you put in. I find the two short excerpts really apt, as they bring out the experience, thoughts and feelings of the characters. Small insignificant details like "As I received my candle flame, I smiled at the headmaster’s assistant, thanking him silently" helps breathe life into the characters, although they do not help in advancing the story. I also find your description of the candle flame very accurate and creative. "It was a lovely sight and it looked like a leaping, jumping dragon that raced and danced about wildly in its confines of the candle." This changes something as simple as a candle into something mesmerising and beautiful. Great work!
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